Do you think this is a good enough fable?

We have to write a short fable for a 6th grade LA project; do you think this is good enough?





The Greedy King





There was once an envious king who could not stand anybody possessing something that he did not have. To help satisfy his greed, he made it a law that anybody entering his kingdom was required to relinquish their most prized possession to him.





With every new citizen, his hoard of treasure grew. Then one day, a traveler came with nothing but a bundle of food and an extra pair of clothes.





Like every other person entering the kingdom, the border guards brought him to the king, who looked at his meager belongings with distaste.





“Traveler, what is your most prized possession?” the king asked.





The traveler glanced at his small bundle, and then though for a moment. After a period of silence, he answered with certainty, “O king, it is my happiness.”


……….


The most valuable possessions are not material, nor can they be taken or bought.
Do you think this is a good enough fable?
You know, that was good. I liked it good job!
Do you think this is a good enough fable?
Very good, especially for 6th grade. You have a bright future.
Reply:I actually liked it a lot. It's a very nice story with a good message and everything seems to be in the place it's supposed to be.





Good job! You should definitely get a good grade.
Reply:Awsome. It's very meaningful!
Reply:Excellent.